Generation Kill Fic: Sand

[annundriel]

Turns out I wasn't kidding about this being a slippery slope. In fact, someone may as well have covered it with a tarp, turned on the water, added dishwashing liquid to the mix, and shoved me down it. (Poor man's Slip 'n Slide, what?)

This came to me while I was writing Dean, Castiel, and bubble baths. Go figure.

Much love to ginnith for putting up with the massive attack on her inbox.

Brad/Nate. PG-13. 225 words. Sand to eternity, and them stuck in the middle.

Sand

Sand gets everywhere, into everything. Gritty and pervasive, it was here long before them; it will be here long after.

From here to the horizon, it’s all he can see. Sand to fucking eternity, and them stuck in the middle.

Brad feels Nate shift beside him, knows if he looks he’ll see dirt-smudged features and something else that won’t wash away no matter how hard Nate scrubs.

Some things stay with you.

Bodies by the side of the road.

Fuck-ups made by command.

Not one goddamned jalapeno and cheese to be found.

The feel of your LT’s skin, sweat-slicked and smooth beneath the palm of your hand as you jack him off under the cover of darkness, quick and efficient because there’s no time for more out here. No time for you to spread him nude and wanting, for you to finger him open until he’s begging for your cock. No privacy for you to fuck him until all you can taste is his sweat on your tongue and all he can feel is you all over him.

No more rationing or poor commands, no more bodies.

No more sand.

Not like this. He’ll drag Nate to the beach sometime; try to teach him to surf. Watch Nate’s skin turn pink in the sun.

The sand between their toes won’t hold any history but theirs.

Comments

[mclachlan.livejournal.com]

The sand between their toes won’t hold any history but theirs.

What a killer last line to a perfect ficlet. You're so my favorite, you know that?

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

I am so happy with that last line, you don't even know.

<3

[lattimore.livejournal.com]

I got so dorkily excited when I saw you'd written Brad/Nate \o/ The yearning in this is just lovely - that they at least have one beautiful thing to hold onto.

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Yea! I love Brad and Nate and Brad/Nate, so it was really only a matter of time before fic happened. I was putting them off until I got other fic written, but this ambushed me in the middle of the night.

I'm so happy that you liked it! :)

[olivelavonne.livejournal.com]

You did good. This is really lovely. And I love what Brad wants to do to Nate.

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Thank you. You know how I get about these things. :)

And I love what Brad wants to do to Nate.

I think Nate probably loves what Brad wants to do to Nate.

And then Nate will just have to turn the tables on Brad. ;D

[l-s-d-me.livejournal.com]

I really liked the opening line. the whole thing was really good.

but more importantly, *cough* dean and castiel in a bubble bath??! that sounds really nice, lol.

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. :)

but more importantly, *cough* dean and castiel in a bubble bath??! that sounds really nice, lol.

Hee. It was a drabble prompt: Cas discovers bubble baths (http://annundriel.livejournal.com/538307.html?thread=1373379#t1373379). It demanded further exploration and is currently off with my beta.

[l-s-d-me.livejournal.com]

it's adorable! cas in a bubble bath is just as precious there as it was in my mind ♥

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Hee! Thank you! He may have become, ahem, slightly less precious in the expanded version. ;)

[spirited-lizard.livejournal.com]

This is so beautiful! Especially the last line. I like it much!! :D

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I'm was so happy with that last line when I wrote it. I'm glad you liked it! :D

[cleokoneko.livejournal.com]

*draws hearts* So poignant and beautiful!

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Oh, I'm so happy you liked it! Thank you!

[jones6.livejournal.com]

FFFFF this is awesome ♥♥♥

NO JALAPENO AND CHEESE WHAT IS THIS WORLD COMING TO

But seriously this was so poignant and this:

something else that won’t wash away no matter how hard Nate scrubs

is just a great line, really, amazing work :)

_{Would there be a link to this Dean/Cas/bubble baths thing anywhere?}

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

NO JALAPENO AND CHEESE WHAT IS THIS WORLD COMING TO

The world is clearly FALLING APART. (Aaaand now I want jalapeno something-or-other.)

I'm so glad you liked this. Thank you! :D

Would there be a link to this Dean/Cas/bubble baths thing anywhere?

I can direct your attention to the original drabble prompt/response: Cas discovers bubble baths (http://annundriel.livejournal.com/538307.html?thread=1373379#t1373379). I'm expanding it into something longer, and that's off with my beta.

[pjvilar.livejournal.com]

So lovely!

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Thank you! :)

[meeks00.livejournal.com]

Oh, this was just beautifully written -- like a prose poem. I'm not well versed in poetry, but I figure that this is what it'd be like if I ventured into that side. The last line was pure genius, just how I think endings should be! Just hits you with surprise, right? But it fits with everything else and closes it with a certain tone -- this one feels like release from a realized dream, or hope, or just something to look forward to. Great sentence structure, very hot in the middle there, which surprised me. Overall, I thought this was just absolutely lovely! Thanks so much for sharing!

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you so much! I love playing with word count and sentence structure and flow. I'm pretty pleased with how this turned out, and I am so happy you liked it. :)

Great sentence structure, very hot in the middle there, which surprised me.

I hope not a bad surprise!

[meeks00.livejournal.com]

Oh! Absolutely a GREAT surprise! No lie, it went straight to my delicious bookmarks and then to my rec list ;) I do hope you keep writing!

[lunasky.livejournal.com]

Really gorgeous.

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you! :)

[alethialia.livejournal.com]

Not like this. He’ll drag Nate to the beach sometime; try to teach him to surf. Watch Nate’s skin turn pink in the sun.

The sand between their toes won’t hold any history but theirs.

Gorgeous! And these last lines are just killer. Really nicely done. Thanks so much for sharing!

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you! I'm so glad you liked it! :D

[oxoniensis.livejournal.com]

That's so gorgeous!

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! :)

[laura-iskra.livejournal.com]

such a beautiful piece, thanks for sharing!

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Thank you. I'm so happy you liked it! :D

[fosfomifira.livejournal.com]

Such beautiful, lyrical writing. I'm especially fond of the last line, all the promises held in those words.

Thank you so much for sharing.

[annundriel.livejournal.com]

Oh, thank you. I'm so glad you enjoyed it! :)