Prologue - Rough Draft

I promised Neesha that I would write her a story of her choice for her birthday. There were some things I refused to write, like the PotC/Farscape thing and the Muppets thing, but for the most part I gave her free range in her choice. I figured, okay, I can write a short story and have done with it. :)

And then I did something really stupid.

I shared a large paragraph-type thing with here that I had written in class one day (probably History or something *snore*). It has actually ended up kind of haunting me when I go back through notebooks, because the main character(s) stepped almost fully formed into my mind. And so did the look of the period and the world. This does not happen often for me. Or rather, it does, but it does not hit me so hard as this has seemed to.

At any rate, I'm posting the large paragraph-type thing because I can and because I'd like some input on the formatting (ie. possible paragraphs) as well as any other helpful suggestions and/or ideas. I'd also like to know if it's repetitive at all.

( Prologue Rough Draft )

Hmmm. I think I'd like to add more to it, come to that.